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To write a compelling message, first you must completely understand the One Central Truth of your offer
To write a compelling message, first you must completely understand the One Central Truth of your offer. Photo by Bayu Syaits on Unsplash

It is all too easy to start writing, come up with a first sentence…
…and then the rest of the sentences.

But something doesn’t feel quite right.

That is typically because you’re not dead sure about what you’re writing about.

For this reason, we greatly encourage our clients to drill down to the One Central Truth (O.C.T) of what they’re trying to say.

Ironically, unearthing this O.C.T can take longer than actually writing about your offer. You may have many variations and iterations before you hone in on what it should be.

Discovering it however means you have the guts of your message under control.

Other language – a metaphor or two for example – may describe your O.C.T in picturable imagery.

You may give an example or two of a client using your product or service – aligned to your O.C.T.

But first you must know, deeply, the core of what you’re offering.

Without it, you’re floundering in the dark, swinging wildly at the ball with your eyes closed.

Without understanding your One Central Truth, you’re like, kinda making an offer that you’re not too sure about, but that you hope that by boring people to death they’ll read to the end of your copy and more out of sympathy than belief, kinda know what you’re talking about…perhaps; or not.

You only have the opportunity to tell one story to someone about your business. Make sure it is a great yarn.
You only have the opportunity to tell one story to someone about your business. Make sure it is a great yarn. Photo by Mike Erskine on Unsplash

As an individual, we are all many stories. From our sex to upbringing, religious and political affiliations, likes, food preferences…you name it, depending on your start point we can tell different yarns.

Our businesses too are many stories. You could focus on many different aspects of what and how you provide a product or service.

For a business though, you can only tell one (initial) story.

Which one?

The story which emphasises what is in it for a customer.

The story that provides a what and a why, and which reveals your heart and soul.

The story that also does all the heavy lifting for the rest of your organisation’s storytelling (web copy, social media, blogs, sales and marketing collateral).

These crucial 2 – 10 words which announce your offer can’t require the reader, listener or viewer to have to guess what it is you’re flogging.

All a customer cares about (as such) is what is possible in your offer for them.

If you use something too abstract, then you have to explain.

Explaining Is losing.

But if someone can immediately see and grasp what the value proposition is, then you run the risk of them:

  • Asking you to tell them more
  • Reading more deeply about your offer
  • Jumping onto the video you’ve also made

It means your one story must intrigue while it explains.

It means your one story must answer back of the mind questions, and keep the possibility of deeper exploration open.

It means your one story must the most important few words your business will ever need to get right.

Unearthing and polishing these words is no walk in the park.

For a start you’ve got to understand and reveal the One Central Truth of what your business is about – your purpose.

You might be able to figure out and define a customer-facing proposition all by yourself.

But it is unlikely you’ll succeed. We usually need help from someone who understands business as well as the power of language, to sort the wood from the trees.

DHL's slogan or Million Dollar Message is deceptively simple, effortlessly good
DHL’s slogan or Million Dollar Message is deceptively simple, effortlessly good

It would be interesting to know how long it took DHL to come up with its slogan/tagline (first, most important story).

You can see it on their distinctive yellow courier vans – Excellence. Simply delivered.

According to DHL’s website, this its actually its mission; its vision being to be the Logistics Company for the World.

Usually I’m not that keen on using deliver in your Million Dollar Message – after all, everyone delivers something. But delivery’s DHL’s stock-in-trade so is a legitimate use in their case. (It’s similar to a chemical company have fair rights to the use of solution if they so wish).

However, all three words and their punctuation are superb in DHL’s case.

The use of a standalone ‘Excellence’ is excellent. The full stop after it gives it emphasis. There’s a delightful ambiguity around whether excellence is what DHL provides, or what their customer receives.

‘Simply delivered’ is a nice double play on words. An emphasis can be placed on either, and as a consequence provides slightly different meanings.

The overall effect of the slogan is effortless; which is ideally what you want when describing yourself.

But while it appears effortless, you can be certain a lot of time and thinking went into its creation.

Any business can and should express an essence of its own story as succinctly as possible.

Perhaps reducing it to three words is too big an ask for many – but such an objective should not be sneezed at.

After all, we all have access to the clever storytelling use of language. And it may be the trigger that helps people remember our what and why.

At the same time it should be recognised that finding that essential truth about yourself is no easy thing. If you need a hand, give Punchline a call – it’s our stock-in-trade.

If your narrative, including a digital story, doesn't follow the rules hardwired into our brain, we reject it
If your narrative, including a digital story, doesn’t follow the rules hardwired into our brain, we reject it. Photo by Valentin Salja on Unsplash

There’s many ways to tell a story,share a narrative.

But all good stories share characteristics.

  • We identify with human characters
  • Any ‘journey’ isn’t interesting unless there are obstacles
  • If the situation is the same at the end as the beginning, the effort of reading, watching or listening to the story feels futile

As Carl Alviani writes in a Medium article ‘The Science behind Storytelling’, our brains are hardwired for narrative.

If the story doesn’t have the above three elements, we’re simply not that interested.

The same story itch has to be scratched when it comes to digital experiences.

Our interaction with a website, app, device or service also needs to follow our hardwired story arc requirement.

Alviani’s diagram of this arc is:

Old normal > clear goal > obstacles > external allies > struggle > new normal

From our brain’s point of view, if a digital experience doesn’t follow this pattern, we find it a huge struggle to make it fit a narrative structure. The story simply doesn’t make sense.

But, there’s a story for every user experience.

As Alviani writes:

“What’s imperative upon us as designers is to recognise these elements, and accept the challenge of fitting them to a narrative, so the user doesn’t have to. [my emphasis]. That’s our struggle, and we have an incredible array of allies on hand to help us. All that’s missing, really, is the motive.”

Are you struggling to create a narrative around your product or service? Need a hand? Give Punchline a call…it’s not necessarily easy, but it is doable.

Our survival as humans has come down to the fact we're hardwired for story
Our survival as humans has come down to the fact we’re hardwired for story. Photo by Robina Weermeijer on Unsplash

Why should we regard our instinct for story as a survival skill?

It’s because our information exchange, along with our ability to solve problems as a group is how humans have got to the top of the ‘smarts’ pyramid (as far as we’re aware). Don’t forget, virtually all of human communication through the ages has been the spoken word.

The move to agriculture, then cities, the Industrial Age and Information Age came about through cooperation at large scale – common goals shared by large numbers of people.

To achieve this (and much of our other advancements) we had to share an idea.

The only way for an idea to persist and spread is being being durable in our minds.

A story creates durability. As story has a sequence of events, and invites the listener to put themselves in the role of the protagonist.

A story links to our ego, hitching a lift on our self.

As outlined in this Medium story by Carl Alviani (and backed by research over the past decade), we most respond to stories that follow a particular general structure.

  1. A character, that we have been made interested in, has a goal, which is backed by a clear, understandable motive.
  2. But the character has not yet reached the goal, and is blocked by obstacles that engender risk and consequences of failure.
  3. The character must struggle to meet the goal. Allied characters and resources are encountered, which aid in overcoming the obstacles.
  4. Once the obstacles are overcome and the goal is reached (or not, if the story is tragic) a new normal is established, which remains in stasis until a new incident prompts a new goal.

Inherently hardwired

We also inherently know the difference between a satisfying and unsatisfying story – our understanding of narrative is hardwired.

This narrative structure is hugely flexible, as seen in the multitude of stories that exist.

But what is means when we attempt to sell, encourage or convince in the modern world, is a similar narrative structure must be experienced.

No matter what it is we’re pitching, if we fail to follow this proven formula, we inevitably fail to engage with our audience.

In other words, if we don’t adhere to the rules embedded in our brains we might as well shout at the wind.

The only people who should (possibly) use solutions in their first story are chemical companies
The only people who should (possibly) use solutions in their first story are chemical companies. Photo by Alex Kondratiev on Unsplash

The great default word for businesses trying to describe their ‘what’ is…solutions.

You see it everywhere, far too often.

The trouble is, we all provide a solution of some kind.

And by using the term, you then immediately have to explain what your particular solution is.

So why not use the wonderful extent of english language to actually describe your solution?

Why not unearth the metaphor that captures the essence of what you do and use that to give people an associated idea which unconsciously forms in their mind?

Solutions is not the solution, even if it sounds like it should be.

(If you’re having trouble moving beyond the limiting idea of solution as a descriptor, give Punchline a call. We’re great at helping you discover your real Million Dollar Message).

Your essence is your why and purpose and does a huge amount of business heavy lifting
Your essence is your why and purpose and does a huge amount of business heavy lifting. Photo by Ileana Skakun on Unsplash

To know what your business really really is, and express it in a form that resonates with all is rightly a holy grail.

Understand and use your business essence, expressed as words, and you:
Have the basis of your first, most important story…and all other stories
Have an internal company rallying call
Have soul

However unearthing your essence is challenging; to say the very least.

Finding the authentic description of what makes your business tick – and why others can care – is no walk in the park.

It is certainly no use attempting to brainstorm your way to your essence. Brainstorming leads you down endless roads of creating fiction, which people cannot own.

The only way to find the spirit of your business is through questioning.

Only questions, from questions, can drive to the One Central Truth about your why or purpose.

From there, only by weaponising words around your One Central Truth can your craft an essence of expression.

Again, this is a real challenge.

But, unearth your essence, and you have a Million Dollar Message to carry out an extraordinary amount of business heavy lifting – now, and into the future.

Climate change action is missing a message which says 'we can do this'
Climate change action is missing a message which says ‘we can do this. Photo by Jon Tyson on Unsplash

The world and its climate is going to hell in a handbasket.

Yep…I get and accept the science…and that we’d better not mess around too much in slashing our carbon emissions (and also stop plundering the rest of our planet’s resources).

However there is a vital missing message around the “I’m telling you something and you’re not listening” narrative which predominates at the moment.

That missing message must incorporate:

  1. We can do this
  2. We can do this together
  3. We should be optimistic

Because a particular danger with the current climate change story is an impression that it’s all too late.

And if that’s the perception, could you blame anyone for an alternate course of action to fiddle (or party) while Rome burns?

Climate change action can continue to shout we need to do something.

But climate change action desperately needs a gateway metaphor – a term that encapsulates life-affirming responses PLUS hope.

Otherwise we risk not getting everyone, or anyone, onto the same boat – a boat taking us all in a different, doable direction.

So, as a plea (and something I’m more than happy to help unearth)…give me a climate change action story I can believe in and be a part of.

Give me a message of optimism – and I’m in boots and all.

Rhetoric is the wonderful use of language to persuade people
One example of rhetoric is a pithy saying which captures a shared frustration. Photo by Rosie Kerr on Unsplash

Words have power, and people have “an appetite for well-expressed wisdom, motivational or otherwise,” says Ward Farnsworth.

He’s dean of the University of Texas School of Law, and author of Farnsworth’s Classical English Rhetoric.

The book shows examples of rhetoric (the art of persuasion) from the famous such as Churchill, Lincoln and Dickens, and lesser well known speakers.

Phrasing contributes to effectiveness. A 2000 study by cognitive scientists at Lafayette College found when people were shown two statements of the same pithy saying, study participants were more likely to say the rhyming aphorism seemed true.

“As O.J.Simpson’s lawyer once said, ‘If the glove doesn’t fit, you must acquit.’ The study shows that the way an idea is expressed can affect judgments about its merit,” Ward Farnsworth says.

A more motivational example is Napoleon Hill’s dictum, “Whatever the mind of man can conceive and believe, it can achieve.”

The details of wording make a difference Farnsworth says.

“While there are many ways to say the same thing, one may be more pleasing and convincing than all the others because of the way words are arranged. For example, parallel construction where two halves of a claim are ‘attractively balanced,” can be effective he says.

‘Marry in haste, repent at leisure’ is a parallel construction.

A reversal of structure, or ‘chiasmus’ is also attractive – “ask not what your country can do for you; ask what you can do for your country” he says.

Ward Farnsworth says metaphor use can make a simple idea compelling.

When business people talk about ‘dropping the ball’, or ‘scoring an own goal’ – they are making implied comparison to sports.

A metaphor usually succeeds by making its subject more visible, or by making it simpler, or by caricaturing it.

The quote ‘Everyone is a genius. But if you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will live its whole life believing that it is stupid’, woud be far less powerful or evocative if it stopped after the first sentence.

These are some of the principles he lays bare in opening up the tools of rhetoric.

What use could your business make of such persuasive language (or even a Million Dollar Message!)?

A great business story allows the viewer or reader to imagine themselves as part of the picture
A great business story allows the viewer or reader to imagine themselves as part of the picture. This advertisement does just that.

A good business story allows the viewer or reader to imagine themselves as part of the action.

A great business story enables that person to be the hero(ine) in that story.

Which means a Wellington bus-shelter billboard for Auckland University elevates itself into the realm of great.

Make your future self proud

Five simple words capture your imagination and offer an immediate promise.

Firstly, the message is doubly personalised – ‘your’ and ‘future self’.

It has action and intent – ‘make’.

And most importantly of all it has a metaphor which is directly applicable to the viewer – ‘proud’. We can picture our own pride…which can only be a positive emotion.

Moving beyond the five words, you’ve got to look to see how you can achieve this state of happiness.

Ah, Auckland University, along with a better-find-out-what-this-means URL, neverstop.ac.nz (which, surprise, surprise, takes you to Auckland University).

Wish I’d thought of it! (As this Facebookerer did)

(And if you want help to craft your own first story, and not just imagine it, give Punchline a yell).